Much like how we previously offered a query letter critique, this time cofounders Tricia Lynne and Maxym M. Martineau join forces to weigh in on a lucky winner’s 1,000-word passage. For this sex scene critique, a member of the Facebook ATK community was randomly selected via contest, allowing us to post their words and once again demonstrate the subjectivity of the writing community—sex scene style.
Warning: The PDF in this article is NSFW. Read at your own discretion.
Sex Scene Critique
Given the nature of the critique, which was heavily comment-based and harder to decipher based off the length of the entry, we’ve elected to upload a PDF for ease of reading.ATK Sex Scene Critique_Upload
*Note: The above PDF is intended for the use of learning and not redistribution. Aside from the founders’ comments, the passage belongs to the owner, who will remain anonymous.
So there you have it, a bonafide sex scene critique from two of our very own! All in all, it seems that both cofounders were on the same page. While subjectivity is a common denominator in the publishing world, there are also instances where two parties agree (and considering these two are CP lovers, it makes sense).
No matter how seasoned you are at writing sex scenes, one thing remains constant: the brain is key. As Tricia Lynne expertly notes, “The brain is the biggest sex organ.” And that’s exactly why we, as readers, want to know emotionally what’s happening in addition to the oh-so-fun physical aspects. How are the characters feeling? What are their reactions, both externally and internally?
By focusing on creating a deeper POV, you can entrench readers in your story in a way that is both meaningful and engaging, encouraging them to “enjoy the ride” (if you will) in more than one way.
It’s not always easy to determine the line between to external motions and internal reactions, but if you can strike a balance between the two, you’ll certainly be well on your way to a sex scene that simmers.
Finessing a sex scene of your own? Be sure to check out our recent posts on All The Kissing’s blog, where we touch on everything from appropriate sexy-time vernacular to the nitty-gritty deets of writing a smokin’ hot scene and the romance heat levels themselves. And if you want the opportunity to win giveaways such as these, be sure to join the ATK community on Facebook. We’re always looking for ways to give back, and who knows—your words could be next!